2-03b: Revised Essay

Hello everyone! This time, I’m going to introduce everybody about Julia Roberts. Do you know her? Have you heard her name? Surely, you know her because you study “Notting Hill” in the listening class. Her real name is Julia Fiona Roberts, and her age is 45. She has worked long time. Her birthplace is United States. The height is 175 centimeter. She appears a lot of movies and she is a very famous actress. “Mirror Mirror” is a movie quite recently and she appeared the part of a bad witch in it. Did you see it in the theater? I wait for DVD of “Mirror Mirror”, I want to see it quickly. This time, I’m going to introduce everybody about three movies, family, and awards and other movies and scandal on herself.

At the first, I introduce “Valentine’s Day”. Have you seen it? The movie was shown in 2010, and love story. The movie director is Garry Marshall. She appeared the part of a soldier on the American armed forces, and her official name was Kate. Co-stars are Ann Hathaway, Taylor Swift, Jessica Alba, Jessica Biel, and Bradly Cooper, etc. The movie drew Valentine’s Day of each ten couples who live in Los Angeles. And it is collection of short stories. I saw the movie. Each short stories were very interesting and moving, I was moved to tears. I thought that the movie was a very heart-warming movie after I saw. I recommend the movie “Valentine’s Day” to everybody.And this director “Garry Marshall” is a wonderful director in the world. He has ever invented lots of hit movies. For example, “Runaway Bride”, “The Princess Diaries”, “Raising Helen”, and “The Princess Diaries 2: Royal Engagement”, etc. He invented masterpieces of love movies and he is genius. “The Princess Diaries” is my favorite movie, too. I want to see the movies, I only heard the director was “Garry Marshall”. I am looking forward to seeing the movies which he will invent in the future.

Next, I introduce about “Pretty Woman”. Have you seen it? This movie is my favorite movie because it is very interesting and pretty story. Maybe, Girls like this movie. She played in a call girl at this movie. The name is vivian ward, and she played in a poor woman. She was poor woman at first, but she meet one man. After she met him, she changed her life. He is too rich man and he likes her on the movie. She fall in love him and the end is happy end. This movie is love story. This movie is called cinderella story by everyone. This movie has dream for girls. Her partner’s actor is Richard Gere. He is too cool, so he is much the role. And director is Garry Marshall. He is nice director. So This movie is very good for everyone. in this movie, she is so cute and sexy. If you are free, why don’t you watching this movie?

Third, I introduce Notting Hill. You know or have you ever watched the movie? Notting Hill is a Love story which happens between a divorced man in the UK and an actress tremendously popular among people. The role of Julia Roberts is Anna: she is an actress. In fact, Julia Roberts is also a real actress today. So we think her performance is like herself. She was thinking about the suffering as an actress while playing the role of Anna when she made the film with others. For instance, if she wanted to get along with other people equally, they would not have treated her as a human equal with others because she is a tremendously popular actress. Surely, she experienced the suffering on real life. I seemed to see her role of Anna performance is simply and cheerful personality. I think there are many things we can sympathize on this movie. For instance, the feeling of love which we can’t get along with him well,  So please watch this movie, if you didn’t watch it yet.

I introduce about Julia Roberts’ family. Her family is a husband and the twins of boy and girl and a boy. She got married once in 1993, but it was divorced in 1995. And she got married again to a movie cameraman in 2002.

She had scandals on herself. She was acquainted with a lot of actors. She was engaged with Kiefer Sutherland, but she didn’t marry with him. After that, she went to trip with Jason Patric. He is closed Kiefer Sutherland. In 1993, She married with Lyle Lovett, but she discover in 1995. And she has an affair with Daniel Moder and she married him in 2002.

And I introduce that many awards which she was awarded a prize. She was awarded a prize Golden Globe Award of the Best Supporting Actress on “Steel Magnolias” which was shown in 1989. And she was awarded a prize Golden Globe Award for Best Actress-Motion Picture Musical or Comedy on “Pretty Woman”. She became the candidate the Academy Award on “Steel Magnolias” and she was nominated for the Academy Award on “Pretty Woman”. She was awarded a prize Academy Award for Best Actress on “Elin Brockovich” which was sown in 2000.

Or I introduce that other on her movies. It is “Larry Crowne” Her role is a lazy teacher of speaking at Community College. A man; Larry Crowne who was dismissed from a Supermarket enters there to reemploy other work. They met together and birth a comedy drama. If you watch it, you can see her different performance as an actress in comparison with some movie which we wrote as above.

That is why; Julia Roberts has a great power and depth of her performance. She has a great ability as an actress. As the evidence, she gained many prizes and she has been as a famous actress from her childhood to now; she is 45 years old. Isn’t it great? So we recommend you to watch the movie played her. Thank you for reading.

References

Karz, Mike, & Rice, Allan, Wayne, (Producers) & Marshall, Garry, (Director).b (2010). Valentine’s Day. United States: Warner Bros. Entertainment, Inc.

Milchan, Arnon, & Reuther, Steven, (Producers) & Marshall, Garry, (Director). (1990). Pretty Woman. United States: Buena Vista Pictures Distribution.

Kenworthy, Duncan, (Producer) & Michell, Roger, (Director). (1999). Notting Hill. United Kingdom: Universal Pictures.

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Draft Essay 2-02b: My favorite place

I’m going to introduce you about my favorite place. My favorite place is my home. There are three particularly favorite rooms in there. One is my room. Two is the living room. Three is the bath room. I’m going to introduce you about three rooms.

The beginning, I introduce you about my home. It’s in the southern part of KUMAMOTO City and the country. A rural landscape spread out as far as the eye can see. People of the area where I live are very gentle and heart-warming. And I like a peculiar to smell of my home. I can breathe a sigh of relief when I get back to there from the university and the part-time job.

First, I’m going to introduce you about my room in my home. My room is about six mat room and places bed, desk, closet and dressing table. There isn’t television. Furniture is few. I don’t know why, but I feel that things are much and my room is mixed up together. Furniture is few but small articles are many in my room. But it’s a point of that I can breathe a sigh of relief. And I introduce you about my favorite furniture. It’s my bed. My bed is particular because it’s low repulsion bed. It’s very comfortable bed as I’m able to soon fall asleep and have good sleep.

Second, I’m going to introduce you about the living room. There are of the living room is more than three times the area of my room. And the living room is the place where my family gets together. Everybody stay in there when we eat dinner and watch TV. The living room is a symbol of the pleasure of a happy home. And there is a lot of furniture. There are television, two tables, sofa, dressing table, computer and many photos of my family in the living room. When it’s fall and winter, a table changes to a kotatsu; covered table with a heat source underneath. And an ordinary carpet changes to an electrical hot carpet and a gas fan heater appears on the living room. And we eat oranges and one-pot dish cooked on the kotatsu together. Sometimes, my mother and sister sleep in kotatsu because it and the electrical hot carpet are very hot and comfortable.

Third, I’m going to introduce you about the bath room. I like there because I love taking a bath. I take in the bath tub more twenty minutes every day. I disliked taking in there until I was an elementary schoolchild. I don’t know why, but I gradually liked taking in there. Now, I’m in the bath room about one time every day and I recover from the fatigue of my journey. It’s very relax time for me. And I do facial massage every day while I take in the bath. It’s also very relax time.

Considering the circumstances mentioned above, my favorite place is my home. Sometimes, I think that I want to live by myself after I graduate from this university. Because my hometown is very country and my family is very faultfinding. But I realized happiness that my family and hometown is very pleasant place for me. The whole my home is my favorite place.

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Essays 1-03b: Language Learning Story

I’m going to tell you about my language learning story. I learned Japanese and English and German from a lot of opportunities and people.

First of all, I’m going to tell you when I was in childhood. When I was in early years, I learned mother tongue from my parents. I heard from them what I was very late that speaking mother tongue. When I was in the nursery years, I learned from my teachers and friends. I didn’t speak so much because I was very reserved. But I just rattled on my family and relatives. I often cut the nursery school and I went to the house of my grand parents. So, I just rattled on my grand parents and uncle and aunt and cousin. I learned elemental Japanese from my family and relatives.

When I was in the elementary school, I learned fundamental Japanese. For example, hiragana, katakana, Chinese characters and calligraphy. And I learned Roman letters and took communication with on ALT teacher and my friends. In the elementary school, I took test of Chinese characters called “Chinese characters meet” every year. Therefore I cultivated my powers of Chinese characters.

When I was in the junior high school, I learned Japanese more detail. I learned modern Japanese and classic Japanese. And sometimes I learned calligraphy. And I learned reading, writing and communication in English. Suddenly, study of junior high school got difficult. Especially, I was remembered the textbook of English as memory work. But it was pleasant and worth doing for me. In addition, when I took the first test, I learned English from my sister. If I didn’t learned English from her, I couldn’t be good at and like English. Consequently, I began to like it. My strongest school subjects were English and sociology in my junior school days.

When I was in my high school, study was by far more difficult than junior high school. Especially, classic Japanese began to more difficult. When I was in the first grade, I hate it and Chinese classics. I took small tests of them in a class every day and sometimes studied after school as I didn’t passed them. And I learned reading, writing, speaking and listening in English. I was very weak in listening. I couldn’t follow English what a person says. I remembered vocabulary as hard as I could. Consequently, I could begin to read long sentences in practice exams.

And now I am in the university. I’m learning reading, writing, speaking, listening and grammar in English. It’s very hard and difficult for me. And there are a lot of homework. When I was in the first grade, I learned writing and pronounciation in German. German was very hard for me. But now I feel that English is more difficult than German. I have been weaken of listening. I can’t follow English what a person says. But I like speaking.

Lastly, I want to study English more. I don’t have a plan that study abroad because I don’t think that I want to it now. I want to speak English more and fluently. First of all, I have to get power of listening and writing and get better points of TOEIC. And I would like to work a job that is connected with English after I graduate.

 And I would like to get a job out Kumamoto prefecture.

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Essay:1-02c University Life

Exchange students from overseas will needs to know is some things. we will tell you about KGU. First is what we can use a library of KGU. Second is whatwe can use a bus of KGU. Next is about English Lounge. Next is about a bakery of KGU. Next is about students’ dining hall. Last is about Lawsonin KGU.

First of all, we will explain about library. There is a big Library in KGU, and the library has a various of books. The library is very very very comfortable. we always go to there to do my homework. When you want to study or read books or do your homework alone or need research , you should come to there! There are many data as newspapers and books and computers and so on. Anyone else there is fashion magazines renew every month, so we can read many fashion magazines. You can read it, and you can know Japanese fashion style. The other thing, there is AV corner in he library. There are many DVDs there. You can see a lot of movies in AV corner. Another one, there are newspapers of many countries there. You can read it of your own country, and you can get a lot of information around the world. we suggest to go there one time, and to read comics. There are many Japanese comics, and it is translated English. So, you can read easily and interesting. My favorite comic is ONEPIECE. It is very nice Japanese comic!! If you are free, you should read it. You will be able to concentrate and live a full time in there. By the way, you might be able to work there as a part-time job. we saw anotice of advertisement for part-time help to our student. First of all, please go to the library in KGU. You will be sure to be addicted toread it.


Next, you all can use a bus of KGU. This bus is servicing to KGU from Kumamoto Station. A purpose of this system is what KGU serve convenience for a day student. If it were difficult for you to go school by only yourself, you can use a bus of KGU. And you can go school easily! x) Please be sure to use when you go to school. :)

Next, we tell you about facility of exchange students. There is "English Lounge" at KGU. It place is for exchange student. There is the first floor of building No.1. It is the place what exchange students mix well with Japanese students. Lounge staff often held party for exchange students. It is very interesting. You will be able to make a lot of friends. If you go there, you will have chance to make many friends. And we can enjoy conversation, discussion and so on at English Lounge. And we can chat and eat snacks there. Moreover, we can have a party, game and so on. For example, Halloween party is planned in November, Christmas party is planned in December and the staff held BBQ and tour of Kumamoto Castle and so on. It will be interesting. English Lounge is the place of intercultural exchange. And you will be able to know about Kumamoto more. It is nice chance for exchange students. Open hours is 9:30 to 17:30. Monday, Tuesday, Wednesday, Thursday and Friday is opening. Whoever is  college persons can make use of English Lounge. For example, student, the staff of KGU  etc) English Lounge is surely funny place. Please go to and enjoy there. You will be able to spend a full time.


Next,we are going to introduce about bakery in KGU. The clerks of bakery bake a lot of kind breads at any time. They bake everyday, so the breadsare very very very delicious. There are many kinds of bread which is what we can eat  as a meal or tea and snack, some drinks and soft ice cream. Incidentally. There are about twenty seats. There are a lot of students and teachers and general people and child attending kindergarten at noon. So, we have to come to there a little earlier than usual. Or else, popular breads are often sell out and we can’t plop down into seats. Sometimes, they bake new breads there. we are looking forward to eating new breads. we are going to introduce my favorite breads. They are “Chicken Nanban Bread” and “Mentai Egg Bread” and “Cocoa Roll”, “Blueberry Cheese Pie”.  Other one, we like a strawberry juice which sell at the bakery. If you want to eat breads fresh from theoven, you should go there and eat breads. Let's enjoy a lunch there.

We are going to introduce about students’ dining hall in KGU. There is very broad. But there are a lot of students and teachers at noon. My recommendation menus are “Bibinba Don” and “Meat Udon” and “curry and rice”,”Chanpon”. And, all menus are very cheap. Price is about three to eat in foreign countries. First of all, please go to and eat at students’ dining hall in KGU.



 



Last of all, we will tell you about Lawson in KGU. Lawson is very famous convenience store. The store sell various thing. For example, foods, drinks, magazine and stationery. We can get a meal, tea or snack and drinks at Lawson. Kind of food is rice dish, noodle or instant noodle, sandwich, salad, and so on. We can have hot to eat and cold to eat in here. Kind of tea or snack is cake, pudding, ice cream, chocolate, chipsand so on. there are our lunch and snacks. There are a lot of goods at LOWSON. We can buy many goods cheaper. So, we often use there. The store is so useful for us. I want you use  this convenience store.



what we would like to tell you is KGU has many convenient and useful places.we told you about a bus of KGU, English Lounge, Bakery, students’ dining hall and Lawson. Those is interesting and kind places for exchange students. And we can use them freely. So, you shoud be active. Be active, and you can make many friends and enjoy university life at KGU. we want you use many places and enjoy university life together and we wish this information is useful for you. Have a happy studying abroad!

I co-authored this essay with Ruri & Mayu. We used content from our previous, individual essay posts (1-02a-b).

Individual essay posts (1-02a-b)

Mayu'blog here (2012.05.23)

Ruri'blog here (2012.06.30)

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